Thursday, February 28, 2008
Helping Students Use Textual Sources Persuasively
2. "...1) Many students like Shirley misunderstand sources because they read them as stories. 2) Many students expect their sources to tell the truth; hence, they equate persuasive writing in this context with making things up." I think this is true. Sometimes, sources are stories. But most of the time, they're not. It's easier to think of sources as stories, instead of persausive writing. And not all sources tell the truth. It's easier for someone writing a paper to believe that it's true, but it might not always be the case.
3. "Even when students understand that the assignment asks for more than the fill-in-the-blanks, show-me-you've-read-the-material approach described by Schwegler and Shamoon, they cling to narrative structuring devices." This is so true. It's harder to analyze a topic than to just state all the facts in an essay. I think most professors look for the analysis essay rather than the state all the facts essay. My HST 112 professor this semester, Professor Ebner, is such a professor. I had to write an essay that incorporated no information outside of lecture and discussion sections.
Sunday, February 24, 2008
"The Curious Researcher" pgs 165-192
1. Exercise 4.2
2. Writing Multiple Leads/Exercise 4.3
3. "Your opening is your first chance to capture your reader's attention. But how you begin your research paper will also have a subtle yet significant impact on the rest of it."
4. "The first part-the lead, the beginning-is the hardest part of all to write."
5. "Leads must be sound. They should never promise what does not follow. Leads, like titles, are flashlights that shine down into the story."
Wednesday, February 20, 2008
Notes on "Evidence Given Before the Sadler Committe"
“Evidence Given Before the Sadler Committee.” http://www.victorianweb.org/history/workers1.html
· “At what age did you first go to work in one [a factory]?
--Eight”
This is scary. I couldn’t imagine working in a factory when I was 8. When you’re a kid you shouldn’t have to worry about finding a job. You should worry about what game you’re going to play next and what color you’re going to color your picture.
· “When trade was brisk what were your hours?
--From 5 in the morning to 9 in the evening.”
16 hours of work a day is terrible. Noone, adult or child, should have to work 16 hours a day. Especially in a factory. Just like slavery, no one thought this was wrong.
· “What was the consequence if you had been too late?
--I was most commonly beaten.
Severely?
--Very severely, I thought.”
Being beaten for showing up late is quite an interesting leadership technique. I can't imagine being 8 years old in a factory and then being beaten if I show up late. Children shouldn't have had to worry about being late for work because they didn't want to get beaten.
· “What time did you begin to work at a factory?
--When I was six years old.”
This quite came from a little girl. I don't understand how noone thought this was wrong. 6 year olds shouldn't be anywhere near a factory. I can't imagine how these kids dealt with their work.
· “What time was allowed for your meals?
--Forty minutes at noon.”
To be honest, this could be a lot worse. It's barely enough time to eat all of your meals for a day, but I'm sure the bosses could have given even less time than this.
Sunday, February 17, 2008
How I can use "Bury the Chains" in my essay
"Bury the Chains" Pgs 324-354 and 365-366 summary
"Bury the Chains" Ch 21 summary
Saturday, February 16, 2008
"Bury the Chains" Ch 18 summary
Tuesday, February 12, 2008
"Bury the Chains" Ch 15 Summary
Thursday, February 7, 2008
Brainstorming
- Sweatshop working conditions today
- Sweatshop policies today
- Compare to policies and conditions of the 19th/early 20th centuries during Industrial Revolution (Child labor, etc)?
- Work conditions of slaves on Caribbean sugar plantations
- Policies for slaves on Caribbean sugar plantations
- Compare to sweatshops today (and factories in 19th/early 20th centuries?)
Tuesday, February 5, 2008
Possibly Essay Question
How are sweatshop labor conditions and policies like the work conditions and policies slaves had to endure in Caribbean sugar plantations?
I think this would be a great essay topic because there is a certain hypocricy that goes along with it. While reading this book, I, and certainly some of my classmates, have judged the British in this era, thinking things like "How could they just stand by and watch slaves be treated so badly?" Today, a lot of people work in sweatshops, not in the U.S. but in other countries. Most people don't get involved with this issue. No one really thinks about it. It's a little bit hypocritical to judge the British and then do pretty much the same thing they were doing at the time
"Bury the Chains" Two summaries
Pages 192-198 of Adam Hochschild's Bury the Chains begins by explaining the sugar boycott. It began in 1791, after Parliament refused to pass the bill to abolish the slave trade in England. It was not the boycott of all sugar, just a boycott of the sugar produced by slaves. The boycott was mainly enforced by women, who bought and cooked the food for their families. The idea of the boycott was spread about in pamphlets. The last part of pages 192-198 is about The Abstract of the Evidence delivered before a select committee of the House of Commons in the years 1790 and 1791, on the part of the petitioners for the Abolition of the Slave Trade, written by Thomas Clarkson. The booklet of the condensed version was sold all over England, and was used in the United States in the abolition movement in the 1850's.
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 11 Summary
Monday, February 4, 2008
Comment on "Bury the Chains"
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 9 Summary
"Bury the Chains" Chaper 8 Summary
Thursday, January 31, 2008
How Others Write Essays
Wednesday, January 30, 2008
"The Curious Researcher": 5 helpful tips
Another tip I think would be useful was on the bottom of page 5. Ballenger says, "But if you're dreading the work ahead of you, then your instict might be to procrastinate, to put it off until the week its due. That would be a mistake, course. If you try to rush through the research and the writing, you're absolutely guaranteed to hate the experience..." I think this is very helpful, especially to me, because I, like many others, am a horrible procrastinator. In high school, I put writing essays off until the last possible minute. And for high school, that was ok. Nothing was really that hard for me, and it definitely didn't count for most of your grade for the entire course. But, unfortunetly, my habits carried over with me to college. I am still a procrastinator, but I'm trying really hard to get better at homework, and especially writing essays for this course. I always think I'm going to get a bad grade, because writing has never been my strong point.
Another thing that I think would be helpful is the "Questions to Ask Your Instructor about the Research Assignment," on page 11. I think this is helpful because a lot of students are confused over the assignment sometimes. A lot of professors wants formal writing, but some don't. Some want you to use the pronoun I and a lot of others don't. It really all depends on the professor, and I think students just need to ask questions about the assignment if they have them, and not worry about looking stupid, which is the case a lot of the time.
On page 15, Ballenger writes, "But factual writing doesn't have to be dull." I think this is helpful because I really think just chugging out facts is boring. I find it irritating to write these kinds of papers, especially in high school. Everyone else in the class was writing on the same topic, with mainly the same availability to resources, and then I end up producing a paper that has the same facts as everyone else. I think its boring to just look up facts and statistics and put them in an essay. I think it would be especially boring for a professor to read. I think Ballenger should expand on how to write a research paper thats not boring.
A final thing that I think would be helpful is Figure 1, on page 13, titled, "Why Write Research Essays?" It explains informal research essays and formal research essays and compares the two. I think this is helpful because some people, myself included, don't think informal and formal writing have anything in common. And its good to know that they do have things in common.
Monday, January 28, 2008
Comment on "Bury the Chains"
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 7 Summary
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 6 summary
Thursday, January 24, 2008
Possible Essay Topics
Another topic that I found interesting was the fact that the people of Britian stood by and watched all these horrible things happen to the slaves in the Caribbean. I think that maybe the people who did not benefit monetarily from the sugar plantations in the West Indies may have not known what it was really like on the plantations, and therefore didn't really care what was happening. I think that the people who grew wealthy off these plantations, such as the ship captains, the plantation owners, or the families of these people, didn't really care that so many slaves were dying because the conditions were so disgusting and degrating on these plantations because they were getting rich. They were killing people and letting people die for the purpose of getting rich and gaining power. I would use Hochschild as well as other websites or books or magazines that effectively portray this as sources if I chose this as an essay topic.
Wednesday, January 23, 2008
Comment on Chapter 4 Paragraph
I find this paragraph particularly irritating. To be honest, I can't really think of the right word to describe how I feel about this fact. After further reading in Chapter 4, I find out that after slavery was abolished in the Caribbean, there were only 670,000 former slaves left, after bringing over 2,000,000 to the Caribbean from West Africa, whereas in the southern states of the U.S., only 500,000 slaves were brought from West Africa and over 4 million remained when slavery was abolished. This is horrible. I'm astonished by the fact that these Caribbean slave owners worked so many people to death on sugar plantations. I really don't understand why so many people let so many be killed for so long. Or were the British people, some of whom made all of their money off the sugar and slave trades, really just that clueless? Maybe some just didn't care because they were so wealthy. I honestly have no idea. It's baffling. If these women had never been put into slavery, they would have been bound for marriage and children. But instead, over half of all women enslaved in the Caribbean never had children. This makes me sad. A lot of women now always dream of having children; I'm sure it was the same for the women in this time period. I could not imagine being a woman in the time and being enslaved in the Caribbean, knowing that I would be worked to death on the sugar plantations before having children. It must have been devastating for them.
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 4 Summary
"Bury the Chains" Chapter 2 Summary
In Chapter 2 of Adam Hochschild's Bury the Chains, he begins telling the story of a young African, Olaudah Equiano, who was born in the 1740's. When he was still a child, Equiano and his sister were captured by slave traders and brought to the coast of Africa to be shipped off to an unknown place to them, the Caribbean. When he arrived in Barbados, no slave owner would want him; he was too sickly from his voyage, so he was "fattened up" and then sold to Royal Navy officer Michael Pascal. For 6 years he worked for Pascal, learning English along the way. In 1762, Equiano was promoted to Royal Navy able seaman. Soon after, he was yet again captured and taken to the island of Montserrat, where he was sold to Robert King. Instead of working in the sugar fields, Equiano worked loading and tallying cargo, cutting King's hair, and as a crewman on a fleet of small ships carrying goods and slaves from the island to various West Indian islands and the North American mainland. In 1766, Equiano bought his freedom. Afterwards, he worked on many ships, and he once traveled to the Arctic. He was soon tricked by the captain of a slave ship, who said that he would sell Equiano when they reached land. Luckily, he escaped.